Jordan Preston 

Lexie Nagle 

Nicholas Presti

Jack Ochs

On Tuesday, July 7^th at 2:15 in room 106 B, our group met up with our English teacher to discuss project 1. Being in the library made us very focus and into our writing. It made us think about what exactly we needed to do to improve our paper. In the meeting, we all felt comfortable. We were excited to see what our other group members wrote about and were also very eager to share our thoughts after listening to it. This meeting connected us as a group. We learned a lot about each other from each piece of writing. We found that this conference was helpful because it gave us a lot of insight on what the rest of our group thinks to help improve our writing. We have found that giving examples is always a great way to improve writing and help connect with the reader by giving them a real life situation. Meeting with everyone to discuss the project was very helpful because it helped give us a lot of insight on what others think about our individual projects. We feel that it is always very helpful to have other people look at the work because sometimes you may not see certain mistakes that a fresh pair of eyes will notice. While in the conference our group collectively learned the importance of specifics, expansion on main ideas, and how a scene can improve our writing.

            Specifics, what are you trying to say? What sets your experience apart from mine? In our conference we discussed how specifics can help the reader stay interested, you can’t connect with a very broad idea or statement but a specific detailed events can give writing more weight for the reader. Expanding on a thought by adding more detail is also something we touched on. Expanding is what writing is about what else can be said? How can I explain this better? How much more detail can I add to make this the best story it possibly can be? Finally we spent a lot of time on how scenes can effect the connection the reader has with the writing. When you paint a picture or play a movie, viewers resigned to what you see in writing the reader imagination is their key too seeing what the author is trying to portray.

            Some key points that were addressed in our workshop were to draw a specific scene or event that would allow the reader to get a feel for the story. We talked about pinpointing a certain place and time in which you clearly remember an impact the artifact made on you. The more of a scene the writer creates the easier it is for the reader to be drawn into deeper detail about the meaning of the artifact. The significance of weather something was handwritten or typed brings a different feel to an artifact. A hand written not is something that represents the writer more has a whole because of the personal work put into it. While a typed message doesn’t give off the same feel.